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Chapter 2-20 – Heretic

Once again it was obvious why he couldn’t just hide in a hole. He had a moral imperative to do something, in addition to his own personal responsibility. Technically, Lucy couldn’t be used to get at him if he didn’t allow it, but he refused to even entertain the possibility of abandoning her. Callum didn’t want to leave Lucy in GAR custody for any longer than he needed to, but it was just like the couple down in Florida. He needed to prepare and do things right.

An unavoidable delay was letting Chester’s people smuggle the portal anchor in. The fifteen hours was in a way a good thing, because it forced him to take the time to make sure he had everything ready on his end. Since he’d been stocking his cache for so long, it wasn’t actually much a survey, but it was better to do that without feeling overly rushed.

There was one stop he did have to make before anything else, and that was to get a vacuum flask from the nearest industrial shop. The beat-up old thing wasn’t rated to protect from something like lava, but it’d still prevent ambient heat from getting at the portal focus. The focus itself was metal so it could stand more heat than he could, but mordite had such a low melting point that he didn’t want to take the slightest risk. He didn’t even care if the dewar got trashed, so long as it worked long enough. His portal focus falling apart mid-rescue would be a problem.

After he recalled to his cavern-cache, he changed into the civilian body armor and helmet he’d gotten, which felt overly cumbersome but it wasn’t like he was going to be running around. Nor did he expect it to block any serious offensive spells. He was more worried about shrapnel and debris and other incidental things, like what had hit him in France. Especially since he was going to be hanging out somewhere fairly dangerous even before the attack.

Callum’s ability to work through portals gave him a ridiculous flexibility that he’d only just started to explore, but he’d already figured out one application. Not too far south and east of his Mexico hide out was Pacaya, Guatemala, which was in a near-continuous state of eruption. There were lava rivers all over the place, which was precisely what he wanted.

Fortunately, a thermal-reflective blanket was one of those things included in the basic camping equipment he had stashed away, and even though it wouldn’t be all that effective, it was better than nothing. That combined with the breathing apparatus he’d already gotten was enough that he felt safe getting near an active lava flow, especially with the six hundred yard buffer.

Once again he used the chair to get around. It was annoying how dependent he was on GPS to figure out his location, but it wasn’t like he could see what was going by whenever he was in mid-blur. By this time he’d picked up an old-school GPS hiking handheld, and while he wasn’t completely sure he trusted it, at least it wasn’t a smartphone.

While flying chair trips were still fairly draining on the vis front, the new model didn’t need carrying capacity so it was just a little bit smaller, and every bit helped. So did the excess mana in the area, which helped him recover between jaunts. For some reason, the mana generated by the sixth portal world didn’t seem to drop off as rapidly to the south as to the north, so he didn’t even need to tap his gut-portal for the boost. It was only maybe four hundred miles, so it really didn’t take him long at all, even though he was being far more conservative than the panic-driven stunt that had seen him to Mallorca.

Nighttime made it easier to navigate, actually, since the lava flows stood out starkly against the dark ground around the volcano. It was a sort-of tourist area and so not supposed to be terribly dangerous, but even so he had his breath mask out as he aimed himself down toward a dark patch near a particularly large flow. There were still hours to go until he expected a message, so he was going to have to camp out for a bit while he waited.

The value of a portal focus was made very clear with how he could leave it open without spending any focus or vis on it. That meant he could just keep his gut portal active and occasionally open a small portal to the area above his cave-cache. That was where he left his phone, since he could get a cell signal from the tower in the nearby town. It wasn’t a great signal, and it wasn’t a great phone, but it worked and that was enough for him.

It turned out that he didn’t actually need the thermal-reflective blankets if he didn’t try to walk right up to the lava itself, so he stayed on the rocky, ashy ground on the next slope over. He knew he had to nap before it was showtime, even if it was just a couple hours, but he was too keyed up to manage it right away. Instead he pulled up the layout that Chester had given him and looked it over for the fourth or fifth time.

The black site was surprisingly large and small at the same time. It sprawled out over a big compound with training and housing and storage and all the things a completely independent operation would need. Teleporters should have meant that a lot of that wasn’t necessary, but he appreciated that the base was set up so it could be run independently if necessary. It made the place a lot different from most of GAR’s centralized infrastructure, which made him think that whoever ran it was independent of the stuff he’d seen so far.

The actual holding cells were just in a small central area, underground, which was all he was worried about. There weren’t many of them, so it wasn’t like it’d be difficult to find Lucy, but at the same time it meant he wasn’t likely to be able to cause a distraction by letting a bunch of prisoners loose. An isolated cell was better for him anyway because if she was surrounded by mages he had no idea how he’d deal with that without massive collateral damage.

Hopefully they didn’t realize that themselves.

Even with all the preparation, with his boulders and water grenades and the lava flow, he actually didn’t want to fight anyone. In fact, real combat was very much a losing proposition for him, since he didn’t have training or proper magical defenses. The best thing would be if he could portal in, grab Lucy, and bail before anyone was the wiser. That didn’t seem likely though, since they surely knew at least some of what he could do.

They’d be ready for him. He just had to make sure they weren’t as ready as they thought.

***

“Are you sure he’s even coming?”  Harold Harper, head of House Harper, glanced up from the document he was signing and gave Ray Danforth a frown. “You said he hung up on you.”

“Fairly sure.” It was not a secret that they’d put Lucy in the BSE facility. In fact, they were making it as public as possible, because they needed Wells to know where she was. There was no use baiting a trap that was hidden away from the prey.

Ray had actually been surprised by how Wells had cut off the communication. Usually people listened and responded, even when it might not be in their best interests to do so. But Wells hadn’t even hesitated, which made it difficult to know if he had enough information to actually come after the Harper dud. Lucile was the only connection they’d found inside GAR, and she was even the go-between for Wells and Alpha Chester.

So far, there hadn’t been a hint of Wells contacting the shifters, though it wasn’t like they could stop every subordinate that came to Chester’s house for business. Not that they were making any secret of their scrutiny, and Duvall had even sent someone to demand the teleportation pads that Wells had supplied them. She had hit the roof when she’d found out, but she was far too busy to go deal with that sort of thing herself.  Or at least so she claimed; Ray suspected the reason might be she just didn’t like dealing with shifters.

Still, Wells had been shown to be resourceful and the more people who knew her location, the more likely it was to get back to him. Considering the effort he’d taken just to retrieve a pair of mundanes from custody, it didn’t seem likely he’d leave Lucile Harper to languish. It still wasn’t a sure thing, but they were acting as if it were. They had to.

“Here,” Harold said, pushing the document across the table. Ray glanced at it before putting it in the folder. Officially removing Lucile from the Harper family was probably unnecessary; their loyalty wasn’t in question as a cadet branch of House Janry, and it wasn’t like they needed more leverage on Lucile. But Harold had insisted when Ray had come to spread the news.

“Thank you for your cooperation.”  The words were rote, and Harold barely glanced his way as Ray stood up to leave. He collected Felicia on the way out, who was half-glad and half-sad to be visiting the Janry-Harper estate on Faerie. She hadn’t told him the full story of how she’d ended up on Earth and unaffiliated with any of the fae enclaves, but on the rare times they wound up in the portal world she was visibly uncomfortable.

“Should just hold her in Faerie,” Felicia said quietly, even though she clearly didn’t like the idea. “It doesn’t matter how sneaky he is if the land itself is looking for him.”

“What fae king would we owe if we did that?”  The question was more rhetorical than anything, just like Felicia’s comment. Felicia nodded in acknowledgement.

“My family would love to offer, and you’d be a fool to agree,” she said. Her voice was more resonant than usual, the siren heritage coming to the fore along with a brogue that she’d worked hard to hide.

“You okay?”  Danforth asked, putting a hand on her shoulder.

“I’m worried,” she said, the sky darkening with her words as just the tone of voice called in cloud cover. A good reminder of how the human portion of Faerie was still Faerie, and fae magic held sway. “They’re already telling stories about the Ghost. Maybe that doesn’t mean much if he’s a mage, but there are fae undercurrents in motion. I’m not sure what happens if we can’t catch him.”

Danforth glanced around. The vestibule of House Janry was not exactly private, but there also wasn’t anyone about at this time of night, so he pulled her closer. Underneath the glamour he could feel the corded muscle of her real form shift as she leaned into him for a moment.

“Time to get back to work,” she said soon enough, thumping her head against his shoulder, then pulled away and straightened her uniform before turning back to the teleporters. Danforth followed, giving her a little bit of space. She wasn’t overly touchy in general, especially not on the clock, which told him how worried she really was.

When they returned to the BSE facility, it was in the process of being locked down tight. There were guards around the perimeter, in case Wells came overland with his flying artifact, and around the teleporters, if he could use the GAR transportation system. Lucile’s cell was protected not by wards, which hadn’t been very effective in the past, but by a high-powered mana jammer to keep any kind of vis construct from manifesting.

The two of them passed through a new set of magical scanners and a hastily-installed airport scanner to hopefully spot any implants that Wells or any of his group might have. It was annoying to have to pass his focus folio through the checkpoint, but that particular security measure was only temporary. Felicia had her token, and some bits of jewelry that she was equally reluctant to give up. One of them was the necklace he’d given her, but others were of purely fae origin and she clearly hated giving them up.

The pair passed deeper into the facility, through the hallway of the central building, past the interrogation rooms, and outside. The holding cells were in a completely separate building, forcing people to cross the open courtyard inside the walls of the BSE base. The grass there was the oddly springy, wiry stuff of the Deep Wilds, and outside the walls the canopies of the monstrous trees broke the horizon like distant mountains.

Unlike the Night Lands, where there was only ever the moon, or Faerie, where the time of day depended on location and the general mood of the inhabitants, the Deep Wilds had an actual light cycle, though twilight and dawn lasted a lot longer than they should. The oversized sun beat down overhead, through the dome that protected the courtyard from the similarly oversized wildlife that wheeled and circled in the too-blue sky.

Ray was already starting to sweat just in the short walk between buildings, and resorted to conjuring up a breeze to keep Felicia and himself comfortable. It didn’t help that they were dressed more for Earth weather than the portal worlds, since they generally didn’t spend too much time in any of them. Cooling enchantments brought the air to a more comfortable temperature as they stepped back indoors, in the vestibule of the jailhouse.

“Ah, good.” Jahn looked up as they entered, the agent overseeing operations by sheer inertia, though the BSE employees knew what they were about. “You can’t by chance lay a geas, can you?”

Felicia shook her head. Jahn heaved a sigh.

“Guess I’ll have to ask King Ravaeb. He’s about the only one we can use who’s not involved, one way or another.”

“Hopefully not,” Ray replied. Ravaeb had a brutal streak, which could make an already nasty business even worse. But it wasn’t his business, so he just moved on and held out the folder. “For what it’s worth, House Harper severed all ties with Lucile when I filled them in.”

“That’s not too surprising,” Jahn said, taking the folder and put it on the desk behind him without looking at it. “Nobody likes a traitor.”

“Out of curiosity, what is the geas for?” Ray was only passingly familiar with what exactly constituted a geas rather than a compulsion, despite having a fae partner. It was more of a fae royalty thing, and while he suspected Felicia was closely related, she definitely wasn’t in that power bracket.

“It’s because despite all this,” Jahn said, waving his hand around to indicate the activity, “there’s the possibility we won’t catch anyone. So it’s insurance. If we can get Lucile to report on whatever base they’re operating from, we can come in full force.”

“Ah.” Ray couldn’t argue with that. Everything they’d seen indicated a group whose strength was stealth rather than raw power. Wells hadn’t been particularly impressive back when they’d first accosted him in Kennecut, and he hadn’t even tried fighting back in the Ardennes. If they could locate his home base, they could attack him on their terms. “You think he’d slip past the Grand Magus? Or Archmage Hargrave?”

“Under the circumstances, I don’t think we can rule out other traitors,” Jahn said bluntly. “We know he’s made agreements with the fae and with Alpha Chester. We haven’t turned up anyone else here in BSE, but these are shifter lands. I wouldn’t assume we know everything and everyone around us, or that this facility is as well-hidden as it’s supposed to be.”

“I’d say you’re paranoid, but this case has been weird from start to finish,” Ray observed.

“Speaking of which, are you going to stay here while we wait?” Jahn asked. “I know you’re not as combat-rated as a lot of BSE folks.”

Ray didn’t answer immediately. Instead he looked to Felicia, who was not combat-rated at all and was actually inconvenienced by being in the portal world. On the other hand, she was more tenacious than he was and had a bit of a fixation on properly finishing their cases, even those that were supposed to be out of their hands. Not that Ray terribly objected, but for Felicia it was part of her fae story.

“We’ll stay,” Felicia wrote on her tablet, holding it up to show Jahn.

“Then get yourself equipped at the armory. I’ll ask Grand Magus Taisen to put you into one of the shifts.”

“Yessir,” Ray replied, and braced himself to head back into the unseasonable heat.

***

Lucy felt like her head was stuffed full of gauze wrapped around thorns. It was hard to think, and when she did think she couldn’t think about some things or else the thorns would start tearing and twisting, cutting through her memories and ideas. Trying to turn her into something else. The fae magic from before was terrible, but it hadn’t been like this.

She sat on the cot, holding her head in her hands, prodding at the chains the fae king had bound her with. It wasn’t the same as the compulsion which had made her act in accordance to strict rules, and it wasn’t like the siren song, which had made her believe something that wasn’t true. It had some components of those but it was all together in a single thing that she could feel poised around her, waiting to strike.

It was terrifying.

Just trying to think around the edges was hard and painful in a way she couldn’t properly describe. It would have been a lot easier to just relax and go with the flow, just lean into the geas and let whatever happened, happen. But if she did that, she had a terrible suspicion, creeping in from behind the gauze, that she wouldn’t be able to change her mind afterward.

Yet, as she groped around thoughts of the big man and shied away from them as the thorns threatened her, she felt there were gaps in the hedge. The geas had too many components, too many moving parts where things didn’t quite meet up. She couldn’t even articulate the thought that she could exploit them, but the feeling was there, down deep where the thorns couldn’t see.

She had to act natural, but she also had to find out everything she could. Be friendly and inquisitive, but not to the point of arousing any suspicion. Any time she got a chance to call in and inform them about what was going on, she had to, but at the same time could never do so where the big man or anyone with him would notice. The conflicting mass of requirements hurt her head, she refused to let them come together or try to make them make sense.

It would have been easy, and she was so tired, but Lucy had been lorded over by the magical all her life. This wasn’t new, or at least, that’s what she forced her fuzzy brain into thinking, even if deep down she knew. She knew she was in trouble so deep that she could never dig her way out on her own.

She had to rely in the big man. Even in the privacy of her own mind she didn’t call him by name, and it galled her to have to just hope for external help.  She’d worked hard to become self-reliant and self-sufficient, as nigh-impossible as that was for a dud serving in GAR. But that didn’t mean she was so stupid or proud as to not know how bad things were.

The ambient magic was so high it hummed against her skin, vibrating off her teeth and making the back of her neck itch. She didn’t know what it was, and the geas kept her thoughts from doing anything but idle uselessly for fear of being torn, but it was just another tiny torture to add to the rest of the mass of misery. She could recall how she’d felt after the first time they’d interviewed her, and how inconsequential that seemed in comparison. Lucy was sure that, one way or another, someone would pay for this.

“I don’t like this.” The sound of someone else’s voice made Lucy twitch and peer blearily up to see Gayle sitting on a chair on the other side of the cell, lips pressed together in distaste. The geas twisted around, assuring Lucy that Gayle could be trusted and that she should tell people Gayle could be trusted.

“I’m not a combat mage. I don’t even like using reversed healing!” Gayle continued to complain, though it seemed to not really be directed at Lucy. “I bet grandpa doesn’t even know,” she continued darkly. “Got half a mind to go out there and tell him.”

Yet, she didn’t.

***

Grand Magus Taisen laced his fingers together, frowning at the others in the room. He couldn’t deny that Wells was the BSE’s responsibility, but he misliked using the Deep Wilds outpost for it. It was never meant to be a containment facility. Like all the garrisons he’d built, it was designed as a training outpost and a staging area for eliminating some of the worst threats the portal worlds had to offer.

Unfortunately, he didn’t have the ability to overrule two Archmages and the Master of Weltentor. In theory he had the authority, but pragmatically they’d just ignore him at best and remove him at worst, and Taisen doubted anyone else understood the logistics that kept the portal worlds under control. There were factions that already decried the resources he needed, and ignored the fact that small problems became large problems.

Just like Wells, in fact.

“We all want our pound of flesh,” Hargrave said, his aura crackling slightly. “But there isn’t enough to go around.”

“He’s a spatial mage, so he’s mine,” Duvall said flatly. While her raw magical might didn’t match her fellow Archmage, her wealth and influence could absolutely bury House Hargrave if she wanted to.

“A spatial mage that nobody has been able to keep under control,” Taisen pointed out, keeping his voice mild. “How do you propose to do so?”

“Lock him down with vis drainers and set him to enchanting for the next decade or two,” Duvall replied, waving it away. “Even if he never amounts to anything else we know he can make enchantments. Speaking of which.” She glared at Jahn.

“We’re in the process of confiscating the teleportation pads,” he said mildly, showing remarkable aplomb for someone who ranked far below everyone else in the room both in terms of status and prowess. “They have been stalling a bit but I wouldn’t be surprised if I had them before anything happened here. Even if Chester is playing against GAR he’s not willing to completely defy us.”

“And what of the vampires?” The Master of Weltentor, Victor Dumas, spoke in a calm and controlled voice. Taisen doubted he actually cared too much about the deaths himself, but as the nominal head of mage-vampire relations he had a valid complaint. “If nothing else, we are owed a weregild for the deaths of so many at the hands of this group.”

“When we find out who else is working with him, and what their resources are, we’ll make sure to include you,” Jahn said.

“I’m not sure there is anyone else working with him,” Taisen said, speaking at last.

“Oh?” Jahn suddenly looked more interested. “We have at least Wells and Hall that we know of.”

“True,” Taisen conceded. “But I’ve looked at the reports of the various incidents. I don’t pretend to know how it was done, but it all has the feel of a single mind, a single approach.” He couldn’t put his finger on it exactly, but it was the sort of instinct he’d learned after dealing with thousands of engagements, both supernatural and mundane.

“If it’s just one mage, then our preparations ought to be more than enough,” Hargrave said. “He folded easily enough the first time. Two Archmages and however many mages and shifters are here already ought to be more than enough to take care of him.”

Taisen suppressed a sigh. That was exactly the sort of attitude that caused disaster. He couldn’t really blame Hargrave though; the man was an absolute monster and practically invulnerable. There were few people on Earth that could really threaten Hargrave, and not much in the Portal Worlds either. But Hargrave wasn’t the target.

“Archmage Duvall,” he said instead. “As you say, he is a spatial mage and in your jurisdiction. But I’m unclear what your role is in our defense. Is there a method whereby you can suppress his spatial abilities?”

“No more or less than any other magic,” Duvall said with a tremendous scowl. “Spatial magic is special because of what it does, not how it acts. Any of you should be able to shatter his shell if you get close enough. From what the younger Hargrave said he is a far cry from being an Archmage.”

“Grand Magus Taisen,” Jahn said. “Ultimately, the actual combat is in your hands. We are trying to capture Wells, or whomever he brings with him, but I understand how difficult that can be.”

“He’s one of my spatial mages,” Duvall growled.

“Archmage, so far he has proven extremely difficult to deal with, and demonstrated abilities that don’t comport to spatial magic⁠—”

“That…” Duvall sputtered. “That heretic is abusing some very dangerous and unusual corners of spatial magic. Nothing that could stand up to any real spellforms.”

“Heretic or not, he has done immense damage to GAR and to BSE.” Jahn said firmly. “Whether captured or killed, if— when he comes here, he will not leave.” The response to that was nods all around.

“Agreed.”


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Comments

Gardor

Oh boy oh boy I'm legit excited for this

Lictor Magnus

Ugh, mind control is never fun. Great chapter though. I’m excited for book 3.

Kcx1

The best thing to do right now.... would be to embarrass them.... And I mean get Lucille and get out making them seem completely impotent and incompetent shredding their aura of authority and setting off a full on rebellion

JP Koenig

I'm excited too but also perturbed. I personally despise mind control stories and find them very unsettling, and I know I'm not alone in that. I hope the 'geas' thing gets subverted swiftly. I would have to drop the story if it isn't because it bothers me too much, and I really want to know how it ends!

Xaim

Well, the cliff was not as bad as expected..

Raymond Mouton

The Cliff, oh the Cliff. When does the first chapter of Book 3 come out ? (Feel free to send book 2 to your publisher/editor) I’ll buy when available.

Andrew

That was just mean. I know you said it was going to be a cliffhanger, but I wasn’t expecting nothing to happen. The entire chapter feels like a setup for the next chapter, not the next book.

Joshua allen

if i was reading this as a book reader i would drop the series if a book ended like this

BJ

Ok, now that is a cliffhanger ending. Poor Lucy. Maybe Gayle will help with the whole geas problem.

Amelgar

damn... I was kinda hoping Lucy just disappeared during that conversation at the end

Tiresome

Would have been a meh Monday chapter, definitely not on par with a week wait chapter.

Draugluir

That's not a great place to end a book

Thomas Kuhn

I agree with some of the other people here. This doesn't feel like a clean place to end a book. You've been building to this point for the last several chapters and ending it without a payoff seems not great

Adrian Engel

I unfortunately have to agree with that sentiment. I would be pissed off enough to not bother buying the next.

Ethan

Mm, as others have stated, it’s an odd spot to end. Feels anticlimactic, knowing that the next book is going to start off with a bang. Should be finalised here with a lead. But that’s just my thoughts.

Cat Man

Probably would've been better to just have the book go over 20 chapters than end a book with a cliff hanger like that

Daniel

It's a fine ending for the book, especially as it's released as a serial. People love The Empire Strikes Back and this isn't too dissimilar. Definitely builds anticipation for next week.

RandomAnkle

It seems the book needs some kind of climax first, before we get a cliff like this

Rascon

It doesn't matter much to us because the serialization of the series, but the end of the book being now feel a lot anticlimatic. Happening in the middle of an "arc" it's not cool. Should end after the rescue lucy or just after wells knowing about lucy being held of

K M

Yeah, i would advice against publishing this book as a 'book'. This wasnt even an ending- cliffhangar or otherwise. Seems like author reached a word count/ chapter count and decided to break it off. We didnt get enough details on preparations on either side that would build enough anticipation to call this a cliff and didnt get any conclusion either way. Why end like this?

Phallusar

Oof, that cliffhanger. When I was younger and more desperate for content I just ate up books that were more like magazine serials and be on book 6 of "create an empire!" but still not finished conquering starter town. I'd say I respected myself more now, but I'm here with everyone else at the $10 tier.

Gardor

I am upset with the ending, shoulda ended the book after rescuing that couple, and then had the Lucy arc be the next book. Just so there's like a large "action" sequence, or something gets resolved, to end the book.

t3chn0fr34q

i dont know what to say but that this is bad. im probably more annoyed because houndsman 3 disappointed me so much today already, but this is still in the top 5 worst cliffhangers if ever read. like i can be reasonably sure he save lucy so there isnt a big what happens next that a cliffhanger is supposed to be. also the book ends just before its climax so the pasing of book 2 and 3 is off.

Gardor

There was a climatic end to ESB, just because it also left story threads open doesn't mean it didn't have a cathartic resolution.

Dee

I’m surprised this is the end of book two—would have thought confirmation of the kidnapping would have been a better stopping point. 🤔

Gavriel

The really scary thing about space mage individual power is that they can probably make a superb portable nuke by putting a baseball sized chunk of enriched uranium into a space expanded marble (replacing the plastic explosives in compressing and holding the geometry of the uranium until the reaction has gone far enough to make it worthwhile); that potentially any space mage could do that given half a chance and some physics education is absurd

chumponimys

It’s upsetting to see the whole BOOK end like this. I know you’re dedicated to 20chap books—which is actually awesome—but we could’ve easily had the climax in here. There were 3-4 slow “testing” chapters that were almost nothing but playing with the edge-cases of magic. In light of this chapter, those feel all the more like deadweight.

Bockus

Er, that's it? The book's just over? No resolution for the conflict that we've been beaten over the head in foreshadowing with this entire time?

KumoDesuGa

I was not a Paton last time a book ended. As this is a serialized novel can I expect a chapter next week or is this going to be books over author spends a while outlining and planing for a book 3 as a whole

Hollowlce

With how the build up to this has been set up I can only see Callum coming out of this in 2 satisfying ways. Either he wins completely and utterly ruins the BSE plans by rescuing Lucy then escaping. Or alternatively he gets captured but kills Duvall. By killing Duvall he essentially forces them to keep him alive as they'll still need a spatial Arch mage. Also by how Duvall's been portrayed she's doing shady shit to prevent the growth of spatial mages and furthering her own. How this will save Callum most likely is that when they go to replace her as the spatial Arch mage they realise that their isn't anyone to replace her skills with due to her shenanigans. The only other potentiality is a wild card. Someone from Callums ancestral origins saves him. Would be a big unknown that we know nothing about. Also he has to start learning the fundamentals at some point or be given a break to actually advance enough to stand his own ground in the magical landscape. Their are my thoughts so we'll see where it goes.

Draeysine

I feel betrayed as a reader. Why did you blue ball me ? Look, books can end on a cliff, but this ended halfway up the hill.

Georgiy

IC warned but the cliff ending is a terrible idea if its sold as a book on an online platform. If anyone actually buys book 2 on Amazon and hits this cliff, they'd RIOT !

Gavriel

This is before the climactic fight... And the last couple chapters combined are shorter than chapter 18 I believe.... Just lengthen the chapters? Combine this chapter with the previous one, and have the actual chapter 20 be the next chapter?

Phallusar

Yeah, this feels like a primed review bomb grenade as a book. Follow it as a serial, you're largely immune to this, but as a book?

Grumble

Not an author nor do I know what is happening next in the story but at this moment in time I would end the 2nd book at 2-19 rather than here and turn this into 3-1.

Andrew

Thank you!

Aclys

I kind of agree with your statements, though im feeling iffy on his chances of actually escaping Gar if they, by way of Duvall or otherwise, actually get their claws in him, all sorts of nasty magic they could probably use to outright enslave him at that point. Though who knows, spending some time in hogwarts jail doing a prison break kind of story could certainly be interesting. as for the wildcard, kind of doubt it would be a deus ex machina directly addressed to Callum, but might be something Else shows up or happens that forces him and Gar to either cooperate or at least ignore each other for the sake of dealing with the whatnot. Personally I'm expecting successful rescue, even more confusion for gar as to how the spatial mage got lava-mancy deployed (another mysterious member of THE secret organisation?!) and then some shenanigans as callum has to twig that Lucy is geased, something she'll no doubt be doing her best to help with, then handle that she's geased and work on getting her freed, plenty of room for fun interactions for them with dynamics that are vastly different from their prior relationship as purely phone-friends.

Doom

Why would you end the book right before the climax you've built up to for over 10 chapters?

mmarkgraf212

Hmm, yeah, gonna have to agree with everyone here, this shouldn't be the end of book 2. You can't do this buildup and not pay it off. Better to have it be extra long than have it just stop short of the action.

Alex Lindsay

Regardless of the what I think about ending the book here, I love the story!

Disaevio

What a waste of time money grab of a “chapter.”

PlasmaticPi

Yeah what a bunch of bs. If you wanted to make sure people dropped you after this month, good job, you did it.

taukid

Yeah, I thought the cliffhanger would be her stabbing him after rescue or that it would be ambiguous whether she got geased before he rescued her. Not a fan of mind control either and I really hope they catch it right away because I don't know if I could make it through an arc of mind control.

Cuticle

Man so many whiny people about the ending... Zero patience

taukid

I actually laughed when I got to the cliffhanger because it was totally unexpected. I thought you were killing someone or they wouldn't catch the mind control or something terrible so finding out it was just ending before the battle was surprising. It doesn't really feel like the end of a book, more like the end of part 1 of volume 2.

H

I thing author is trying to stick too rigidly to 20ch per book for some reason

Jeff Thomas

So much whining? isn't 3-1 right around the corner?

Jeff Thomas

So on to the good. is he going to open a portal to let lava flow right into the base for his distraction? Will he take Both Lucy and Gayle from the same cell assuming that they are both prisoners? Will Gayle not want to use her Corpsecraft on him?

Colby Last

WTF? I thought when you said you'd end on a cliff hanger, that meant you'd have the battle end in some wishy washy way. Not that you wouldn't even have the battle. What does this mean for the release schedule? Are you going on hiatus to plan out book 3 or will you just start releasing the next chapters, regular schedule?

Philipp Gawol

Just chuck a portal into space and drain the atmosphere out of any enclosed space. Duwall is retarded for calling what the MC is doing 'unusual corners', when they're the most obvious things in the world. Honestly I think that Duwall is running a long con, by pretending that spacial mages are harmless.

Colby Last

I got called out by like 6 people for having that theory several chapters ago. I was criticizing the way the author put us in Duvall's POV because it verified that there wasn't anything deeper about Duvall. That there in fact wasn't any plot twist waiting to happen from her. Then six people came out one after another saying "There was never anything about Duvall to begin with so there's nothing to criticize." Of course, it was just fanboys defending the series from any criticism...

David Cohen

Having hard time reading all the comments. Does seem more of a end of chapter. At least it could have ended with someone running in and saying Lucy and Gayle are missing. And agree with NO Mind control shenanigans. Hope Gayle figures out he not 5he bad guy and helps. I've dropped 4 patreon authors I've been following for along time and several more series than that on ebook and RR because authors have been creating week willed / dumb MCs. Contrivance of situations consisting of nothing but plot armor. I expect new stories to be rough. Expect them to have holes that an 18 wheeler can drift through on occasion. A good story line can cover for that with newer authors and I give the benefit of the doubt. But I need to see improvement in the storyline / concept. Otherwise love the story.

Phallusar

Some of this is people giving feedback for how this will work when this is released as a book. Just in case no one has warned IC about how this same sets of reactions is gonna play out as reviews of a book instead of people supporting a web serial who know more content is just a week away.

Kirvin

On one hand, yeah it's a terrible "book ending". On the other hand there were 3 days between Book 1 Ch 20 and Book 2 Ch 1, so not really sure why people are upset. It would really only be a potential issue in the future if this was published book-by-book and not for anyone reading the story now.

Rhaid

The cliff is bad, but im more concerned about the geas. I despise mind control and stories about it and normally end up dropping/coming back after a hefty backlog is filled to get it over with quickly.

Krad Ford

man ..i am disappointed ... i thought something would happen ... this felt like another filler chapter lmao if you could call it that ..

Anders Svensen

Hmmmm, on one hand I like the approach. Ending in a cliffhanger is great and would set up into book three nicely, when/if published. On the other hand, I do agree this is not the cliffhanger to end it on. The whole 2nd book has been building up with no resolution to plotlines for the most part. It would be amazing as a setup to the final chapter of the book and could end with the cliffhanger that he fought off the BSE but was unable to rescue Lucy and have it be a good theme for book 3. Regardless a finished book shouldn't be just buildup, luckily it's still a web serial so most understand that it's just markers. If publishing though please don't leave this off as the final chapter.

Kaizen

Damn. This chapter was a big disappointment. All that build-up for what is essentially a filler chapter. I'm not sure this will work well when it's released as a single ebook.

VorpalKitsune

I'm sorry, pointing out a good point that as far as a book, that is a horrible ending point, is far from being whiny. That's like someone pointing out that a bridge with no middle l, being called whiny. I mean, sure you can go with that, but it's a stupid call out when they are pointing out a bad idea.

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I think it would be much better ending even if the author employed flashforward technique and ended it with GAR's damage report or something before promising to show what actually happened to cause those damages.

AnAbsoluteVillain

This needs to be an epilog in your book and chapter 1 of book 3. it needs to end with them taking lucy last chapter. This chapter is too much build up for a book ending. I would one star the ratings and vow never to read again.

Carl Gherardi

InadvisablyCompelled, I hope you take the comments from your patrons and consider them. I'm pretty sure there is a consensus here that the book really shouldn't end here, and actually releasing it as such is a bad idea

Andreas H.

Huh a geas, didn't expect that. Nice Idea with the lava portal, it's going to get spicy :) Thanks for the saturday morning chapter, I hope book 3 will have a bombastic start!

Carl Mason

Which is going to happen, book 1 is already published, this one will go up as well soon. Everyone going off about this story ending here is simply saying, as you did, that this is a bad idea. You can't build up to a climax and then abort it and blue ball your readers, then expect them to remain readers. You especially can't do that in published novels, imagine harry potter 1 ending with the kids breaking into the east wing and that is it, then you have your battle with voldemort and all the challenges to start off the next book? No, dropped, sorry. Everyone saying this is trying to help; maybe they are belligerent and needlessly cruel about it, but they are trying to help.

Extheme

Like the chapter name, author is also heretic, leaving us hanging like that

Robert

I love this story so far but this is not how to end a book

Tim Deral

Tbh it’s a very bad ending for the book mate. You can’t make all plots revolve around the ending and then end the book there. How do you want to start the next book? Explosions ultra excitement etc. etc.? It would mess with the whole set up of a book.

Mattias Åkesson

This ending makes me not want to keep reading or supporting. A book should not end in a filler chapter with a massive cliffhanger, to much old school tv season ending.

Callum Earle

Just did a patreon sub because when you mentioned on RR that book 2 was done I figured it would make for a satisfying read tied with a show of financial support, this was not satisfying lol. Truly wonderful writing, and I thank you for the story so far, but I think it's a consensus that the end of this book should be a couple chapters ahead.

TjStorm

Two words. And only two words. Bitch face! I think I hate you now mate. Grrrrr!!! Yep, pretty sure I hate you! Rawrrrrr!!! I hope Taisen hurts you bad, because you just hurt me bad. *Sobs* 😭

Pebble

So I wonder if Callum will be able to actually see the Geas since he is unaffected by glamours, which I assume is a component in the geas, thus maybe one look at Lucy and he'll see the Fae magic twisting all around her? Speaking of, I wonder if Gayle can see it herself when she uses her healing magic on Lucy and would be able to break it if needed. Perhaps by erasing specific connections in the brain that are somehow linked to the geas (perhaps created by it when it was cast)? That said, since Lucy seems to be good at noticing gaps and exploiting them, she'll probably figure out how to work around the geas to warn Callum. The Geas might have been too complicated by trying to do too many things at once, and while she won't be able to outright reveal it, she could probably use allegory and some general phrases that would clue Callum to something not being right, and help him figure it out. As for how they might get rid of it, perhaps since Fae and their magic are all about stories, Callum and Lucy could orchestrate events so the story plays out the way they want. I am assuming here that the difference between the different stratum of Fae society is in how much influence they have over the stories they "live", with Royalty being closer to "writers" than "readers" in that they can decide the direction a story will go, or even outright create new stories. By extension, I assume the Geas is like a short story created by a powerful Fae, and in this case they made the story too convoluted with plenty of "plot holes" that will eventually make it fall apart. Also, if a geas is indeed a "story" of sorts, then it should have an ending of sorts as well, and that's why I assume that Callum and Lucy would be able to make it end by playing out the outlined "plot lines", even if they play out differently than the "author" (King Ravaeb) expected. As for the last line of this chapter : "when he comes here, he will not leave." Something tells me Callum will not step a single foot inside the Shifter Portal World. Thinking with portals and all that. That mana jammer. I don't know if it would prevent the creation of a portal, but I wonder if it could affect a portal that was created outside its area of effect and was simply moved inside it. Alternatively, perhaps Callum can do something weird to the geometry of space so that he can create an area unaffected by the jammer?

Siera Scarlet

Like many other people this frankly feels like a terrible place to end the book. I think maybe ending it even just a little later into the story would've been better, like just as he starts his plan to rescue Lucy.

Tragic Hysteria

Wait thats the end of the book? How can a book end just before the climax? Like cmon were right in the middle of the rising action.

Dietz

Hmmm, I've been wondering for a while if 'duds' are actually a thing. Lucy's ability to resist the geas, and the way she's interpreting it, further feed that suspicion. Technomancer reveal maybe?

Anthony Taylor

I think the "duds" are just missing the final spark and going to one of the other worlds would ignite that spark. Especially since I'm convinced Mages come from the supposedly empty world.

Brian

It would be funny to see GAR's IT department fall in to disarray now that Lucy isn't overseeing it. Maybe she was using her technomancer abilities without knowing. :)

Clean Gopher

She had a lot of co-workers. It was more that her access was overly large and less that she was doing everything alone. The high ranked mages and such left them alone, but there were many other duds. We saw this when like 100+ folks were called in for that first round of questioning. Maybe not everyone is in IT or does what she does, but she had a lot other people around, just not sitting next to her.

Eli Heintzman

Oi mate. I dunno who told you books are composed of 20 chapters but they did you dirty. Books 1&2 don't have to have the same number of chapters, and any editor would tell you to just extend until the arc was finished. A truly bastardous ending. If you release hard copies of these books, and book 3 starts with the conclusion to book 2, I would Frankenstein together the first chapters of book 3 to the end of book 2 in protest. I'd even sharpie in the chapter headings as chapter "2"1, chapter "2"2, chapter "2"3 and so on. But then I'd be left with a horribly mischaptered book 3 so I'd only be doing it out of spite. But hey, if spite is good enough for Callum, its good enough for me.

Magnus Hansson

he’s not willing completely defy us. -> willing to

Magnus Hansson

I wonder how "natural" Lucy has to act? Like, for example, what if she roleplays as Steve Irwin, complete with Australian accent? Then she is definitely "acting", and she is "acting" as a very nature-associated person would naturally behave, meaning she is "acting" "naturally" ;) I figure the stronger the fey magic is, the more vulnerable it will be to an amusing loophole argument...