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Hey Everyone,

As I said before, there might be a chance that I'll need the extra few days to get the last chapters. I can tell you for certain now, that I absolutely need a few more days to wrap this story up properly.

These chapters were not sitting right for me, and it took me a while to wrangle them into a place I was happy with. There will still be a lot of editing that needs to happen, and I might need to rely on my developmental editor more than with other books. I had a scene in my head, but it wasn't feeling as fleshed out on the page as I wanted.

These will bring us past the main event, but there will be a few more chapters later in the week as I work on wrapping up the end of the story.

You'll notice the cover that was made in June of this year. I needed to get to that scene, and thought it would take place somewhere in the middle of the book during a Darwin Cruise outing, but the Death Net happened and... yeah, this is what happens when we don't outline. :)

This was a stressful week, and I've not been sleeping well. Anxiety about the end of the story has been creeping through, and I desperately want to do it justice. Be gentle with feedback, but tell me what you like and what you think could be improved.

As always, thanks for your patience!

Brian

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Alteron

Thanks for the chapters, I really like the fast intense storytelling.

BaguaBrady

Very fun chapters. I like the few extended fight scene set pieces you've put in the series - you've got a great style for that. This was very fun with Sal and Jackal busting through walls

Kristian Rasmussen

Generally really enjoyed the chaotic nature of the chapters, but there seemed to be some disjointed situations. At the beginning, when Sal was talking to Hannah, about which shipyard was for sale. Then calling his dad, that has done all the research on buying shipyards, kinda asks for forgiveness for going on the mission. Felt kinda off. Sal seemed to just stand around for most of the chapters. Not really doing anything but destroying the control panels. And getting the second bandolier from Erika (the coffee thing was cute), but never seeming to use it. Even after mentioning that Maxine was out of juice. Was some real good reading, but some things seemed out of place.

Johnny Moseley

Agree on Sal Calling his dad. I was expecting him to ask him about the purchase or that after seeing it he wanted to go through with it.

Amanda

SO GOOD I LOVE LOVE LOVE

nin10do

I hope we are drip feed progress on the town development project going forward I loved the story ending chapters definitely would have loved to hear more about Seth in this book but content wise it wouldn’t have fit with story unless mica was there the a pairing within a story and he probably would’ve not had the confidence to go through a mission

Benjamin Hartmann

I really like the chapters but I don’t understand why you decided to not let Divinity see anything seems arbitrarily. Her ability suddenly follows your rules and not the rules of the created world. Will she see wrong things next time? I would have done it differently, like: Divinity sees that something is off when looking into the future, during the landing phase, when there was a slim chance for a rocket attack. A quick scan reveals nothing. During infiltration she sees a guard she has never seen before. She tries to find out where he is coming from. As soon as she connects him to the labs she knows where to look but it is to late and she finds out about the explosives just before the first one detonates But it is a small inconsistency. Keep up your good work 👌💪,

James Spears

I love the series. I felt not satisfied with this route. Im surprised we went from dungeons and mythic crafting to saving the people on the ocean. I know bastion plot is important. I just cant get how strong Sal could be doing dungeons and portals and save maxines dad and kill the dragon. But executed well and the guild is getting off to a amazing start

Yang Kai

Is that Enigma? Honestly, I had a very different image of Enigma when reading the story, but it looks like shortly after he floods the fires?

Rainy

At what point do they just say "divinity, Sal has changed the future so MANY times... are portals still a major danger for him?"

Gecko

was rereading in #84 as the group is heading in the "upgrade" is both the vanguard and rearguard. unless they are an oroboros think Vanessa is meant to be in front

Atredie

Having re-read these, I am now convinced that someone (or multiple someones) have been messing with Sal's head since he lost his anti psionic hair clip. Didn't want to think Erica was scared of him? I'll believe in psionic or influence based mind fuckery that leaves him vulnerable to even more fuckery before I'll believe that. Add in his forgetfulness? Someone is sabotaging him and erasing his memories of it. Finally, he became less of a dumb ass when he wore the blocker Upgrade made him.

Crisshaun Nelson-Jackson

When did he lose the blocker he made for the back of his head? I thought Author just forgot Sal had made it. Did something happen to it.