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ElSalsaRey

What are all the human names again? Maybe I can help name the weapons. For Leo, Eilia works

trigger_portal_cleanser

Trying a new quoting style where closing quotation marks are dropped if the following quote is from the same speaker. This style is more commonly seen in closed captioning, but the same kind of reason for application applies here as well in my mind. Format: Original quote ↴ Modified quote with [notes] ↴ Modified quote without notes. Notes shown in [square brackets] Multiple possible modifications shown in {curly brackets / braces} ―――――――――― [Page 51] "Ahh "It seem he made it out. A perfect end for my grand finale. ↴ “It seems he made it out. A perfect end for my grand finale. "A brillance team performance worthy of a thousand song. ↴ “A brilliant team performance worthy of a thousand songs. "It seem like my time as human is at an end. ↴ “It seems like my time as a human is at an end. "Next time we meet. You will not find a paladin Leo. ↴ “Next time we meet, you will not find the paladin Leo, "But the villianess Demonic Blade of the Demon Lord." ↴ “But the villainous [‘Villainous’: of, relating to, or appropriate to a villain; or wicked in nature. ‘Villainess’: a female villain.] Demon Blade of the Demon Lord.” ↴ “But the villainous Demon Blade of the Demon Lord.” "With my flame flowing through your being. ↴ “With my flame flowing through your being, "Your are forever bound to me as my armament." ↴ “You are forever bound to me as my armament.” [Page 52] "From this day you're mine." ↴ “From this day, you’re mine.” "Times up~. "Is it everything you hope for, me?" ↴ “Is it everything you hoped for, me? "Heh, not in the slightest. I've lost to the same person twice." "That because we are fated to be hers. From the day we face her at the tourney. ↴ “That’s because we are fated to be hers. From that day we faced her at the tourney. "Now, let us sink into our Queen arms once more." ↴ “Now, let us sink into our Queen’s arms once more.” [Page 53] "Ahhh, it's return to me now. ↴ “Ahhh, it’s returning to me now. "This wonderful feeling. "From before. "The demon seeds from my Queen. "Rooting into my very being. "Eliminate the last of my humanity!" ↴ “Eliminating the last of my humanity!” [Page 54] "Ahh, it is all clear! There are no doubt in my mind anymore! ↴ “Ahh, it’s all clear now! There’s no doubt in my mind anymore! "This is me as a demon! "Behold my Queen! This immaculate form of your blade! Forge my your very own hand! ↴ “Behold, my Queen! This immaculate form that is your blade! Forged by your very own hand! "Such a jubilant! Such joy! For my master! To have an exquisite weapon such as me. ↴ “Such jubilation! [‘Jubilant’ is an adjective. ‘Jubilation’ is the noun form.] Such joy! For my master to have an exquisite weapon such as me. ↴ “Such jubilation! Such joy! For my master to have an exquisite weapon such as me. "And thus..." [Page 55] "Archdemon and the first of your living Demonic Arm. ↴ “Archdemon and first of your living Demon Arms, "Eilia "is on the stage! "As your blade I shall elegantly sing your prowless into the heart of your foes!" ↴ “As your blade, I shall elegantly sing your prowess into the heart of your foes!” [Page 56] "So... "Shall we begin our first dance, my Queen?" "How amusing, after all the trouble forging you. "Let's see if you can keep up with me, Eilia." "On the contray, my Queen. ↴ “On the contrary, my Queen. "I shall elevate your prowress." ↴ “I shall elevate your prowess.” [Page 57] "Is that so? "Prove it to me then. ↴ “Prove it to me then, "Demon blade Elika"↴ “Demon blade Eilia.” [Page 58] "Not bad. "It seem like paladin's soul make a decent blade after all." ↴ “It seems like paladins’ souls make for a decent blade after all. [Page 59] "*giggle* Leo look so much cuter as one of us~. "Ahhh, I can taste the heart wrenching anguish emitting from you guy↴ “Ahhh, I can taste the heart-wrenching anguish emanating from you guys. "Like Gilda said before. ↴ “Like Gilda said before, "You should've just let us take what's our." ↴ “You should’ve just let us take what’s ours.” To be continue. ↴ To be continued.

Nepisa

Very nice ending! My notes: page 1: ahh, it[] seems he a brillian[t] team performance worth of a thousand[s] songs it seem[s] like my time but [a] vill[ai]ness[, a] demonic you[] are forever bound page 2: you['ve] hope[d] for time['s] up that['s] because we [were] fated to be hers. from the day we face[d] her at sink into our queen['s] arms once more page 3: it's return[ed] to [taking root in] my very being eliminat[ing] page 4: no more doubt[s] forge[d] from your ("such a jubilant" - jubilant is the adjective for joy; so I'm not sure what you wanted to say here. "such a jubilant day"?) for my master[] to have an page 5: first of your living demonic arm[s] prow[]ess page 6: on the contra[r]y prow[]ess page 7: (is "elika" supposed to be the sword-name of eilia? like, the name change is on purpose?) page 8: it seem[s] like [a] paladin's soul [made] a decent page 9: leo look[s] so much cuter from you guy[s] take what's our[s] page 10: to be continue[d]

Kizu Kyoiku

I love it!!!! Aaasaas I wish I could buy like however many chapters make a book!

K'tchoo le M

As always I love your work. Can't wait to see what's coming next. I have never dared to offer until now but i would gladly help to traduce your stories from english to french if you like the idea

zzwx1215

ABSOLUTE CINEMA wondering how others will be corrupted

ธีรวีร์ ทองคํา

มีตัด Transition แหะ ความรู้สึกจากหน้าที่ 49 มาหน้าที่ 51 มันรู้สึกขาดอะไรไปแหะ แบบว่าคือหน้าที่ 49 คือโดนไฟแล้วชุบแข็งเสร็จ แล้วหน้าที่ 51 คือผลของการชุบแข็ง แบบนั้นใช่มั้ยครับ?

ibenz009

ครับพอดีมันยาวก็เลยรวบรัดบางส่วนไป อาจจะบ้าจี้เพิ่มหน้าตอนระหว่างลงสีได้ครับ55

ibenz009

Well if you want to post french version somewhere i have no problem with it. Go ahead.

Arthur Yeung

@ibenz009 Here are the grammar changes, marked in uppercase: 51: Leo: AHH … IT SEEMS he made it out. A perfect end for my grand finale. A BRILLIANT TEAM PERFORMANCE worthy of a thousand SONGS. It seems like my time AS A HUMAN is at an end. Next time WE MEET, you will not find A PALADIN LEO … But the VILLAINOUS INFERNAL BLADE of the Demon Lord. Demon Lord: With my flame FLOWING THROUGHOUT YOUR BEING, 52: Demon Lord: From this day FORTH, you’re mine. Blade: TIME’S UP. Is it everything YOU HOPED for, me? THAT’S BECAUSE we are fated to be hers, from the day we FACED her at the tourney. Now, let us sink into our QUEEN’s arms once more. 53: Blade: Ahhh … IT’S RETURNED to me now. 54: Blade: Ahh, IT’S ALL clear! There ARE NO DOUBTS/THERE’S NO DOUBT in my mind anymore! BEHOLD, MY QUEEN! FORGED BY YOUR VERY OWN HAND! WHAT JUBILANCE! SUCH JOY, for my master to have an exquisite weapon such as MYSELF! 55: Archdemon and the first of your living demonic ARMS … EILIA/ELICA is on the stage! As your blade, I shall elegantly SING YOUR PROWESS into the HEARTS of your foes! 56: Demon Lord: How amusing, after all the trouble I’VE GONE INTO forging you. Eilia: On the CONTRARY, my queen. I shall elevate your PROWESS. 58: Demon Lord: It seems like A PALADIN'S SOUL WOULD MAKE/MAKES FOR a decent blade, after all. 59: Gilda: LEO LOOKS so much cuter as one of us. Ahh, I can taste the HEARTWRENCHING ANGUISH emitting from you GUYS. Like I SAID before. You should’ve just let us take what’s OURS. TO BE CONTINUED.