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The Sisters of Dorley — Chapter 34 — Your Sisters in the Dark (39k words) (Patreon)

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I made it! It’s still July in the UK!

It’s had less proofing than usual because I’m very tired. Please let me know about mistakes and typos that I’ve missed.

Content warnings for this chapter: slurs, height dysphoria, general dysphoria

Just to note that if you finish this and you’re still, somehow, awake, you should read my wife’s Dorley fic, Strangler in a Strange Land. She’s working on the next chapter right now! 💕

Edit: three errors fixed — “I claim” to “I can’t claim”; “Silver River Services” to “Silver River Solutions”; Amy’s narration originally used the first person for one paragraph. Wow, I was out of it when I wrote a lot of this chapter. The last few scenes I could barely keep my eyes open.

Edit: Fixed a missing quote mark and a massive continuity error!

Final (?) edit: Wow, I really can’t stay consistent. Russel ➡️ Russell

Definitely the final edit: Another continuity fix.

Comments

Jennifer May

Get some rest now Alyson!! I’m looking forward to tearing into this one tonight!

Jane Ditchfield

Omg! Hold some back! You're giving us so much! I don't want to tell you what to do but please! Look after yourself!

Tamsyn Lawrence

Devoured it in about an hour. You make this seem effortless, but i know it isn't. You make me wanna be a writer for real. You make me wanna be a girl for real. Only one error that I caught: "She leans against him. “I claim to know what it’s like to be trans like you, but—” I think you're missing a "can't" here, as in "I can't claim to know what's it like to be trans like you, but—"

Tamsin Davis-Langley

This was amazing, and beautiful, and terrifying. This felt like we're at the top of the first rise of the roller coaster, about to drop into the REALLY scary parts. And I am so here for it.

Lily Valentine

As always, you've done amazing work. Somehow I get more invested in multiple different characters arcs with each chapter. The biggest new thing I enjoyed was Elle's perspective on Dorley: I love slimeballs who do their best to act well, yet remain slimy, and a lesbian chaser who also cares about protecting trans women is a perfect example of the character type. Pippa's speech made me jump out of my seat cheering! That's exactly the way I used to be. Back before I cracked, I behaved like a compliant little doormat because I was scared any assertiveness or self-worth would make me seem disgustingly masculine. Now I love being a woman who stands up for herself.

DeusExMarina

I don’t know about typos, but I did notice what seems like a few continuity errors, particularly in relation to Rachel’s visit to Dorley in chapter 28. Like, at the time, they went up to Melissa’s new room on the second floor, but in this chapter her room’s on the first floor. Shahida comments on Rachel’s reaction to “finding out all the women in the building are trans,” but she’s known about that for weeks. And later, Rachel sees Steph and immediately recognizes her from a picture on Melissa’s phone, but she’s previously met Steph and didn’t recognize her then. Outside of that, the chapter is really, really good, as always. Honestly, how you manage to put out such insanely long chapters at this level of quality every month is beyond me. I literally do not understand how you write this well, how you manage to make the narration and the dialogue sing like that. It’s like every single paragraph manages to pack in a few more details that make the characters deeper and more real and more fascinating, and I am trying to learn from it, to understand the process so that I may one day maybe write something half as good, and it remains hopelessly beyond me.

alysongreaves
>>114214526

Oh yeah, I'll check on the room thing (this is what comes of writing when I'm so tired lmao). The other two are supposed to be because Rachel's recontextualised everything, and is thinking about everyone there in different ways now, but it could possibly be more clear so I can have a look at that when I get my shit together today. Thank you! :)

DeusExMarina
>>114214526

Honestly, it's totally understandable, given the sheer number of characters and plotlines you're constantly juggling. And I think I speak for everyone here when I say that we're all okay with waiting a little longer for chapters if it means you get to sleep. Or maybe you're like me and you wouldn't sleep anyway because maintaining anything resembling a sleep schedule is hard. But still, take of yourself!

alysongreaves
>>114214526

Fixed the continuity error! I’ll leave the other stuff (Rachel’s comments, her reaction to Steph) for now.

Evelyn Marsh

Holy fucking shit this one had a lot, the way that Will breathed their first breaths of real, actual life was such a vivid moment. It really felt authentic to the process of deprogramming completely toxic internalised transphobia, and I see in her echos of the raw emotion I remember feeling back when I was confronting it myself. And the scene between Trevor and Val was subtle but really satisfying. Like there were so many moments in this chapter that felt like satisfying payoffs and resolutions and progressions of things that have been loose ends for so long. I just really love the beautiful, rich tapestry of characters you've laid out and now that all the huge looming arcs are meeting up the tension and the anticipation is sooooo goooood

Maggie Heels

Finally Elle gathered some more intel about what is happening outside Dorley... but she knows only about grandmonster and Declan :/ [for now]........ can't wait when she gets the info about Val... She already knows about Bea sooo.... POG for Willy she's starting to catching up to Steph and Beth... Poor Pippa... she didn't deserve what hit her... oh Rachel... you'll need to work really hard on how to give a proper apology to her... Ah and of course at last Steph&Beth duo is cute&adorable AF ❣️❣️❣️

SingularCurve

I just finished this chapter and there is way too much for me to comment on, in the best of ways. Thanks again for an amazing chapter that many other authors would consider and entire novella.

EnderX

Wow. Our first perspective from Elle, who turns out to be a caring chaser. Felt odd reading about her being utterly adrift, after her enigmatic affect and presence thus far. And Dorley begins to learn about Dorothy’s moves. Shahida (and somewhat Amy) see Aunt Bea as who she is, strongly caring. Indira laughing at Bea’s attempted refutation of her intimidating persona brought a laugh. I hope Pippa bounces back. Will was a wild whirlwind, now that she’s given herself permission to actualize. Gave Beth a taste of her own medicine after her workout, too. Steph and Beth’s adorableness were welcome respites and touchstones throughout the chapter, even of there weren’t any grand progress with them.

DeusExMarina
>>114214526

Hey, sorry to pop in again, please let me know if I’m being more annoying than helpful. There’s still a mention left of Melissa’s room being on the first floor, right at the start of page 55 on the PDF. I get why you didn’t notice that one, it was very easy to miss. I really like the fix you did for the other mentions though. I liked the added detail of hearing about Shahida’s interactions with Yasmin and Julia.

Emory Ahlberg

I'm always so late! But I just read through chapter 34 and at the risk of sounding repetitive I'm in awe once again of the intricate world you've built. This was a packed installment, with so many pivotal developments, and you continue to juggle multiple plot threads with ridiculous ease! I'm jealous! I sooo loved getting Elle's perspective for the first time. Seeing her discomfort and uncertainty beneath the facade she puts on was fascinating. The scenes at the Hall were pitch-perfect as always. Will's breakthrough during the boxing session and subsequent giddy high was amazing! And God how my heart ached for Pippa on the rooftop, while Steph and Bethany's relationship remains a bright spot. I laughed out loud at Bethany's antics in the group session. She's only going to get "worse," isn't she? 🤣 Your writing flows effortlessly and you've made Dorley Hall feel so lived-in. I'm continually impressed by the depth you bring to this ever-expanding cast. Thank you for another wonderful installment, Alyson!!! And take good care of yourself! ❤️

alysongreaves
>>127923604

Hey, you're only three behind now! Until I release a new chapter at the end of the month... :3

Emory Ahlberg
>>127923604

Oh yeah!? Well -- Then, I'LL release something at the end of the month too! Then YOU'LL be behind! 😝 (...for like 5 minutes hehe) (also can't wait to catch up! ❤️)