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First contact between birb and human is turning out harder to write in a way that's not dry. Too much back and forth question & answers on things readers already know, having a hard time writing it. Might need another day to cook since I keep re-writing sections :[

Also keep flipping between thinking I should write from Keith's PoV or from Kres's.

Getting lost in the sauce on what's fun to read vs what's too dry. If anyone's got requests on what they're most looking forward to, let me know and that'll give me a direction to write!

EDIT: Given the new directions, I'll release the chapter post on monday, that way I have time to include as much of the feedback as I can :]

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Billy Nguyen

I don’t usually comment much but this is one of my favorite stories. Personally love all the Keith POVs and interactions and chapter with Wrath too. I still like these new chapters, but I’d say my favorite was Keith and gang kicking butt and the adorable relationship that’s hopefully, eventually maybe, possibly going to come to fruition? Appreciate your writing!

RedeyeA

I think Kres would have interesting stories about pre fall humans directly from the ship’s AI that Drakonis and Keith would have different opinions on. Kieth had a talk with Tsuya and recovered some of the records from the virtual world that gives him a more complete picture of the past than most humans.

Ranger Science

Love this story, can’t wait for the next chapter. My suggestion - since it’s what I’m most excited about - is to hear what each think of the other’s world. What is normal to Kres is going to be wild for Keith, and vice versa. So I think it wouldn’t be as repetitive to us readers if the exposition was done from the perspective of the character learning about it, rather than the one telling it. Although I don’t know if that makes it structurally harder to write? Regardless, that’s what I’ve been most excited about - that, and both Keith and Kres just absolutely fucking with each other, like how Keith got Wrath to eat a plate.

MarkArrows

<3 Hmm, might be able to fit some Wrath and Keith stories into the chapter, Kres would be interested in knowing what the current machine and human relations are like =P

MarkArrows

That's pretty rock solid, they have a lot of stories from the Icon about humanity's end

Ranger Science

Like - Keith finding out that firebombed area was Kres, and Kres doing his damndest to convince Keith he can breath fire. The actual Deathless and the doggos can play the Straight Man in all of it.

pheonix89

So I'm late to this but anything that ties into how the birds are just going to have a different perspective. Xenofic Xenofic Xenofic!