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Gunwitch Book 1 Feedback (Patreon)

Published:
2026-03-06 11:30:02
Imported:
2026-06

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Mark

I am not sure if the whole 'quip slinging psychopath' thing was always part of her personality, or if it started out of the trauma of her friend being executed - I would have to go back snd check the beginning again. At first I found it mildly amusing, but increasingly her 'personality quirks' (I prefer 'insanity') became the central feature of this story, and not the storyline, plot points, etc. If that is the intention, fair enough. But letting a story be carried mainly by how quirky/funny/crazy the MC is? A bit of a tightrope walk...

Automatic

I have enjoyed the story so far! Thank you for writing it and sharing it with us. I've actually found myself thinking about your story a lot over the last few days, and so seeing this feedback post was an interesting surprise. I'm no writing expert, so I feel a bit embarrassed doing this, but here goes nothing: The good: --I love the world building from top to bottom. The system, the gods, the countries etc. all drew me in right away. --The major characters are interesting and charming. Vasil and hecate's mom stood out most to me. --I LOVED the serious moments of danger and drama that Hecate had to deal with. Her friend being executed, her forced exile, and her initial struggle in the swamp were riveting. --The moments where Hecate is portrayed as young, over her head, yet ultimately smart and competent really work. The Bad: --I like much of the absurd comedy in the story, but I think there can be too much of a good thing. The first three quarters of the story felt like they had real weight because for the most part characters acted plausibly authentically. The last arc went a bit too far with the absurdity for me. This last fight in the bar played out like a monty python sketch. Don't get me wrong-- I love Monty Python-- but the tonal shift is a bit jarring. Your humor works extremely well, but I think it's at its best when you spread it out among your legitimately interesting world and plot at a more moderate pace. My advice, such as it is, is to have faith in your characters. You don't have to try so hard to get us to like them. I already loved Hecate and her friends right from the beginning of the story. They don't have to be standup comedians at all times. The pace and tone right up until Hecate brings Kasia and her brother back to the swamp cathedral was PERFECT in my opinion. It was the perfect mix of comedy and seriousness until then. The Future: -- I very much like the direction of the plot! I can't wait to learn what happens next. You've done a good job providing both compelling characters AND an interesting, mysterious setting. -- I'd like to see a bit more of the serious moments. It's not that I don't like the comedy, I'd just like to see more of a balance. This latest bar fight didn't particularly work for me-- largely because it just didn't seem like real, breathing people would act like that. They were in a serious, brutal situation with extreme stakes and the bad guys seemed more concerned with taking offense at puns than the fact their friends were being mutilated. I guess what I'm trying to say is, Hecate is dealing with some serious emotional trauma. Her best friend was murdered. She was exiled from her home. She is being hunted down by violent religious zealots. She now has a group of people who directly depend on her for survival. And all of this when she's only 18 years old and already feels like she never quite fits in anywhere. It's incredibly compelling, serious stuff. Embrace that a bit more. I apologize sincerely if I'm coming off as harsh. I don't mean to be. I genuinely am really enjoying the story. It's been a daily highlight! I've never given feedback like this before so I'm just trying to be as honest and constructive as possible. I really like it, so I want to support it! I care how it turns out! Good luck! And thank you again!

Ryn

This story is just so fun to read. I like Hecate's personality, losing focus mid conversation to think about flies arse hair. I like how she's always playing at being non-serious and confident with shows of more below the surface. And her sheer competence! Vasil is interesting and unique, and I like their relationship with one another, how they banter, Vasil just going along with Hecate's shit sometimes. I don't think I disliked anything but I'm bad at being critical, sorry. Also I think the guy is still alive? I hope his head is stuck to her being insulted while she fights others from church. And the humor, I've been laughing at this more than anything I've read recently. All in all I'm loving the story, keep it up! Oh, I also like the other characters and the quick acceptance of potentially murderous creatures with no push back, how quickly Hecate's charisma can win everyone over.

Ronny Cook

On the plus side, Hecate's quips are entertaining, and the bar fight shows she is still vulnerable. On the negative side, you're too dependent on the stupidity of your characters. It damages believability. Smart people do stupid things, but not consistently unless operating with flawed information.

David Radford

Froggy goes ribbit! But I am having trouble figuring Hecate out. She seems to have zero empathy, but she also cares about Kasia and Perry a lot.

bronz

I like this story. But this is a terrible way to finish a book. There's no sense of narrative arc to the story if it finishes like this, it's just a random fight in a bar and doesn't result in anything meaningful. Hecate hasn't hit a major level, finished a big quest, or even collected all of the runestones to make any of the really good combinations. We've also had a sneak peak of the big bad Milena the Mad, why introduce a character in a book and not use them? From a writing perspective, this last fight was very overdone. why did it take 6 chapters to say "Hecate teleported around and shot them, some of them put up token resistance and one guy didn't die in a single shot" Less of this and more of the snappy writing from earlier