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Happy Monday Everyone,

So the first thing you're likely to notice is the picture I've added of the shirts that Blathnaid made for me. She's a real-life tailor and designer. We're going to start off with some branded T-Shirts just for fun that I can wear at conventions, and as we add more designs and options, I'll look at opening things up as merchandise if any of you like what you see.

Second thing you might notice is that there are 3 chapters. Look at the word counts and you'll see that they're either 1.5 times the size or 2 times the size of the usual chapters. This week was spent with a lot of revising and editing of the chapters to try and get them right. I'm still not fully happy with how it all flows, but I'm going to come back to it in the future.

I've been thinking about the reward tiers for Patreon, and feel like we need to make this space very Quest Academy focused. All the reward structures are the old ones from Wildcards, so I'd love to hear your thoughts on what sort of rewards you'd like to see in the stories, and then we can figure out what way to make the tiers.

As always, really happy to see and read your feedback on the Chapters. I love how many people honed in on Sophia's actions in the last few chapters. I thought I was being stealthy. :)

Hope you enjoy these chapters!

Brian

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T W

Tyfc!!

Nate

Wahoo I need that shirt!!!!!!

Nate

And now I have 3 chapters to avoid doing anything at work today. Since that’s the case I might as well re read book 4 from the beginning hahaha

Keith

Why you forkin sporkin tease! I was reaching for my wallet and looking for the Merch link before I read the whole post. You sir are a terrible Merch teaser...shame on you!

Sam

Tyfc is thank you for chapter. Anything else is likely a typo

Nate

I love how Upgrade gets the occasional one liner is subtly.

Matthew

Is there a level of patreon to have a character added for the quest academy story too like there was for abidden?

Don

Tyfc. You just knew something was going to happen. I half expected Sal to just say screw it and fix her weave himself instead of using the machine. I can't wait to get Sophia's back story when she talks to Sal. I just hope she had a great hero's name and not something like Re-Do. These chapters actually make me look forward to mondays. I appreciate you for making my mondays a 100 times better.

Nate

Whoa what a twist.

Nate

Wholly fuck we need some back story, I want to hear those two women growing up. 🤯

Paul Tuson

Great chapters

Michelle Ray

Whoa that was epic! (Or Mythic I suppose lol) Sophia is a badass and it's so exciting to see all the hints come together. I look forward to reading her and Petro's explanation for Sal. Also excited to see how the evolution for the visor went. So much too look forward to. What Sal's prize is, more on Fabi's powers, the after party. Thank for such great chapters and I can hardly wait for next week now.

Gabriel Albino

Ok, I was half expecting Sophia to be a badass but with a weak ability. She being hidden op makes sense since Petro ability is also op and just being underutilized Cant wait for next week chapters

Sam

That was very exciting! So many secrets exposed! I hope the visor is okay.

Alteron

Wow, just wow, amazing chapters

Lindenshield

Those were some exciting chapters.

Sunita Caton

That was exhilarating! Thank you!

Darnell Maxwell

Sophia did something in the last few chapters?

Nate

I would love lombardi to do an analysis on Sal after what just happened

Nate

lol did she ever, this changes so many things.

Aidan Zimmerman

Great chapters, wonder what Sophia is going to turn out to be with relation to Hunter's Bureau? Clearly she has a previous relationship with Prestige but it seems to hint at her potentially knowing Robert as well. How is Sophia having the same ability as Sal going to affect the dynamic? Why hypothetically did Sophia not help with all of what Sal is doing now? There is so much to look forward to for next week: Sal's guild getting formed, how powerful Fabi truly is, the afterparty, Doc fixing Sal's machine, how are the rest of the Guilds going to react to Sophia revealing herself. Can't wait until next Monday. One issue with waiting on Monday for chapters to drop is reading them right away but then knowing you have to wait a full week until the next chapters come out. Great job.

Aidan Zimmerman

Another question is, with the debacle of Fabi getting her weave needing Prestige, Doc and Sophia to save the day; how will that impact the skill implant program in the future? Unless now that the machine is upgraded it will work well now.

Dawn Zeleznik

Had to be something up with Sophia with how well she seemed to know the HB and Robert. Great chapters.

Karen Shelton

Oh WOW! 😮 Does anybody else feel like they’ve been chewed up, spit out & wondering if all the pieces were put back together in the right order?! Brian….dude…..that was AWESOME!!!!

C

You Dirty Dog, ending the chapters like that. Crud. Now, I have to wait another week in eager anticipation.

Thomas Todd

Thanks for the chapters, the gala has been awesome so far and the reveals just keep coming

Matthew

After rereading it’s almost like that Sophia and prestige are sisters.

Hakalakala

Haven't read it yet but make some of those shirts with a collar public I will gladly buy 1 or 2 for work.

Keith

For the sake of story continuity, I think there was a small mistake. Sal says he left the cane at the table, but I thought Upgrade took it with her when they split up for dinner. Did anyone else catch that or did I mis read it? I'm going to read the whole Gala portion over again just to be sure. (This series is sooo addictive) These 3 chapters were damn good reading. Also, will the book and audio come out at the same time? I've read bk3 at least 3 times and am looking forward to hearing it.

Nate

I’m checking every day for the pre order of book three on audible. I’m itching for it.

Jason Reynolds

He picked it up when she was talking to Fabi after the Doc Ameye slap. Then Fabi carried it into the Gala for him.

Keith

Thanks. I guess I'll have to read it again...sigh, poor me.

Darnell Maxwell

Well, that explains where Sal got this op ability. Also props to Petro, Krillin is proud to have a brother in arms.

Dawn Zeleznik

Can I ask, did anyone else read it like there may be a problem with Sophia using her ability? Made me wonder if that’s why she was always so cautious with Sal.

Robert jacobs

Holy c$$p those three chapters are so intense. Well done bringing up the root of Sal’s power and leaving us chomping at the bit to find out more.

Charles Gillentine

This was a Rollercoaster my man. What a blast, can't wait for more. Hope Robert gets called out for his constant fuckery.

Hakalakala

Man those powers are going to be absolutely insane. Such good chapters always leaves me waiting for more. Idk what you didn't like about them I thought they were amazing as always. Next week is going to be insane

Benjamin Hartmann

I think I know why divinity swapped with Fabi, so Sal would spend time with her and would go down to fix her weave. Well it is my take on it. I can just agree with everyone else…..But what a blast!!!

Robert Smart

Wow. Suspect Sal just helped unlock someone far more powerful than himself with crafting

Nate

That’s going to be interesting, I feel bad for Upgrade in this regard, she has mentored them both and now they have surpassed her. I hope she gets an imprint too.

Heather Herren

Awesome!!! Robert got his show but maybe not what he was expecting..:-D. I think Fabi really seems to like Sal a lot!! Does that mean Dr Ameye will get involved with the implant machine..:-D. Can’t wait to see what Sal gets. And Sophia…. I thought it was funny Petro called her an offensive class.. that explains a lot!! Can’t wait until next week!! Cool t shirt btw!!

Alteron

Her hero name could be Perfect, not the ability, but in the sense that she makes things perfect.

Ron Blondeau

Wow! Fabi and Sal are going to be a powerful couple. Talk about over powered. Great chapters Mr. Nordon. I was glad to see some of the ancillary characters show what they can do.

Nate

Re-reading these chapters a third time I’m wondering if Rob wanted something like this to happen during the process to show the guilds it should be done under only the most exact specific circumstances so guilds don’t go off half cocked to try copy it. Like Upgrade said, warping it in could damage it. Was that what Rob was hoping for?

Nate

Also shows that this project will need to be a collaborative effort and not just Quest and GRANT, but also the Hunter’s Bureau and Guilds Association.

Naotsugu97

Cheers for the chappies! Hmmm, rewards for Patreon levels? Random Monty Python references maybe? Or, getting to choose which weird VD Victoria gets? 🤣

Janet Beane

I suspect part of the problem is that Sal gave her the full weave, not just the diminished one that they were trying to give her. I also suspect that the machine gave her the full set instead of just the first level and the upgrade paths, thereby needing far more power than expected..

Heather Herren

I read it that she may have hurt someone with her abilities. But we will see..:-).

Nate

I’m thinking maybe she didn’t want Sal to have any pressure put upon like she may have had. If her power is as amazing as it sounds it is, maybe she faked an injury making her unable to fully use her powers as a cover to have as close to a normal life with her family as possible.

Chris Hoopes

So, I love the writing in these chapters. Thank you. Honestly I think longer chapters are great and feel more substantial. I wouldn't mind 2 chapters with the same word count if thats the way it works out. It seems you have a word count goal for the week and that's a great discipline to practice. Good deal Chapter 42 was a real surprise. I knew Sal would be actively changing whatever they had planned for Fabi but Robert's public announcement really surprised me. It feels like Sal is losing all anonymity in a very short amount of time. It really is a coming out party for him in every sense. The moment he takes off his jacket and rolls up his sleeves reminded me alot of the maestro moment in book 3. As much as the walk to the stage seemed like false confidence for the audience, this moment in front of the terminal was the exact opposite. Genuine unwavering confidence. Nice. Chapter 43. "The Hunters with foresight were the first to react". That line. That line works so well to start this roller coaster. Applause is in order. From that moment we are in damage control mode with the tension and anxiety jacked up to 10. Prestige upstaging Eclipse works. We know heros are gonna hero. Having Eclipse start first shows that there are many capable figures willing to step up and do what needs to be done. At the same time it gives us that familiar face we've grown comfortable with. The team work displayed among Hunters is beautiful and shows that they are true heros. So the tracker file update stat dump. I gotta say, as an audiobook listener, that bit is gonna kill the built suspense at that point. In written format you kinda glance over repeated text and move on. I can almost hear David W. working up the tone and building excitement just to have Rebecca W drop some monotone repetitive techno bable. Then go straight back into superheros. I get it. It's valuable info that Sal can definitely use later, but maybe he can look it over later. Like after Fabi is safe. It would be different if it made him aware of some danger or warned against a possible problem. Speaking of warning of a possible problem, Divinity! "Rather than looking anxious or nervous there was a smile on her face." I literally missed this the first time I read it. There's alot going on and once again the Divinity moments are snuck in. This is a "What the Fuck" moment if I ever saw one. So hopfully we will find out next week how many grades the tracker rose in that maelstrom of invention energy. The way it happened could easily have led to it being merged into his head and eye. Instead of being taken off and dropped to the ground. That would have been a convenient upgrade that didn't draw attention and resources away from saving Fabi. Chapter 44. Enter our Second heroine to save her son, Sophia. Honestly I love this. A mother coming to protect her child. Throwing away secrecy and safety to do what she feels needs be done. There is one small thing though. Isn't she about to work together with Doc Ameye to "Upgrade" this machine in order to save Fabi Maccles?!? She says reverting would use less energy but ultimately does work with him to "Upgrade" the machine. Seems like there was someone else who could have filled this role and ingratiated herself with Ameye at the same time. I understand the focus is on Prestige and Sophia but Upgrade became background scenery in this situation. An assistant to fetch materials at best. The opening of Sal's essence gates. How did that help Fabi? It helps Sal and we know why Prestige wants to do it but it didn't actually benefit or assist with saving Fabi. I would love to hear Divinity say she saw it play out very different and that Sophia stepping up was unexpected. In fact, either Sal or Fabi getting upset about Divinity's manipulations wouldn't be that out of place. Anyway this got long again. Thank you for the chapters. No matter what nitpick I make, I was moved to tears and inspired by the writing. I look forward to what happens next.

Nate

I’m wondering if Sal opening up his essence gates mentioning the Perfect was a way for the story to make Perfect an innate ability in Sal like myth crafter instead of having him use skill master to activate and de-activate.

BrianJNordon

I laughed at the monotone repetitive techno babble part. Honestly, that's one of the things I wasn't happy with in these chapters and feel like I'll need to finesse it out a little as we go along. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and feedback. I'm really happy that you're catching all the little insights like the Foresight Hunters and Divinity's reaction. I also had Doc Ameye hold up his hands like a surgeon after he was done crafting, similar but different to the maestro piece. I love that you're seeing the parallels I'm going for. :)

BrianJNordon

These are just tests at the minute. I'd need to get permission from my publisher if I started a whole merchandise thing over here on Patreon. I'm thinking of tying them to tiers and stuff for the future, like exclusive perks. Would save us massively with shipping from Ireland. All of these are done by hand and screen-printed in a local workshop by Blathnaid. (She's real) :D

BrianJNordon

That's something I wanted to gauge interest on. I don't want to make decisions on what the rewards should be without asking the readers, and I don't want to over-promise and under deliver either. I want to create a fair system where I maybe add custom characters created by readers into a pool of characters that I draw on when needed in the story. So if you pick someone really super powered, then the chances of appearing will be lower than say, someone with a more modest skillset that is tied to the plot. :)

BrianJNordon

As someone that dreaded Mondays for most of my school and adult life, I can't tell you how happy it makes me to hear that. Thanks Don! Starting to like Re-Do as a name, thanks for the suggestion ;)

BrianJNordon

Man, we're like 4 books in and not even in Semester 2. This is how we get derailed, Nate! No side stories of Elaine and Sophia tearing up the city as Rival Hunters. :D

BrianJNordon

Really glad that you're enjoying it and so invested in what happens next. Hopefully I'll do the setup justice in the coming chapters :)

BrianJNordon

I'm looking forward to them too! Thanks for reading and the kind comments. I love how people are vibing with the parents.

BrianJNordon

It was in a storm of essence for a long time, I wonder what will have happened to it... :) Thanks for reading, Sam!

BrianJNordon

Thank you so much. I was a little worried about the tempo dragging on for too long, but really happy that it worked out. :)

BrianJNordon

That is quite funny actually. I wonder if he'd just stare at him and be like: "Yeah, you're moving straight to the Advanced Class. Also, stop befriending Body Manipulators, I know what you're up to!"

BrianJNordon

Hahaha, what an endorsement! I was not expecting that sort of praise, but thank you so much. No pressure on the next chapters :P

BrianJNordon

Really glad to hear that. I was worried people would think I was dragging it out unnecessarily.

BrianJNordon

The bickering is out of character for both of them, but fits them so well. I do like the Elaine versus Sophia moments.

BrianJNordon

That's great to hear. They're just experimental for now, but my hope is that I'll be able to commission Blathnaid for a load more designs. Logos and shirts for the different Guilds and institutions. :)

BrianJNordon

This made me chuckle. Seems Sal has a thing for powerful women. Wonder where he got that from. :P

BrianJNordon

Thank you so much, Robert! It felt like the right time for the reveal. A lot of people were already really suspicious of Sophia's remarks leading up to the event, so I wasn't as stealthy as I thought. :)

BrianJNordon

The man is fuckery incarnate, Charles. The Robert he's based on will be absolutely delighted with the comment. :)

BrianJNordon

It was a few things relating to flow. Chris already pointed out on another comment that for audio, the Transference stats would be a massive immersion breaker. I'll need to finesse that, and maybe explain a little more about what Sophia was doing with Doc Ameye. I hate spoonfeeding, but I also hate creating confusion. It's about finding the balance between the two :)

BrianJNordon

Delighted that you enjoyed the chapters, Benjamin. Divinity shows time and again that she's playing the long game. It's hard to know whats going through her head. :)

BrianJNordon

Thanks Robert, at least he was right about the weave being perfect. Guess he didn't really think too far ahead of what it might look like in reality. :)

BrianJNordon

Great questions. I love that you honed in on Petro calling Sophia an Offence Class. Little snippets like that were always super fun for me on re-reads, like little breadcrumbs from the author. Glad you liked them. :)

BrianJNordon

Thanks so much, Ron! It's always hard striking a balance when introducing characters, but I'm glad that it was received well. Andrew is a really fun character to write, and I hope to see more of him in the future. As for Sal and Fabi, they've only just met, so time will tell...

BrianJNordon

That's a really interesting take. I don't want to confirm or deny it, but I think you're looking at it from a fun angle. :)

BrianJNordon

Poor Victoria. Also, as much as I love Monty Python, I'd be far more inclined to go with Father Ted quotes... but alas, I don't think it would be worth an increased pledge. :)

Kenneth Darlin

Sweet!! Really ready for the next bit of explanations and story!!

Robert jacobs

The comments about Sophia bulling Prestige kinda gave away there was more to her than simple restoration.

BrianJNordon

Thanks man, appreciate it. :) Any thoughts on what sort of Patreon reward tiers you'd like to see in the future?

BrianJNordon

Haha, wait... do you want a Robert founding the Hunter's Bureau story? Gotta admit, that would be something fun, and ridiculously badass. It would probably read like Solo Levelling based on his powers.

Dr. Chaos

Put me down for two XL t-shirts and two XL hoodies!! Can we get both you and Blathnaid to sign them? Chatfield too! Woo Hoo! QA swag!

Dr. Chaos

Did Robert (why do we not have his last name by now?) know that Sal’s final version of Fabi’s weave would be too powerful for the Machine? Was he also aware of how powerful she was going to be? (He did have the entire auditorium ready to take her out after all.) Is that why he had Grant dumb it down? I still get the feeling that there’s a significant history between Robert and Sophia (we now know that she was in the Hunters Bureau in the past). Is THAT how Robert knew what would happen? Are children with certain extraordinary abilities being handicapped by sabotaging their weaves? Is Sophia’s ability what a level 15 Skillmaster looks like? Enquiring minds…

Fast Lance

Great work on these chapters

Thomas Todd

It does feel like it's dragging out a little bit but I don't think that's because of how you wrote it, I think ts because we're getting a chunk with a week in between, once it's published fully I don't think it will feel like it's dragging. There were some parts of book 3 that had that feeling that (the creation of the weaves) that dragged a little but once I went back and reread them once we had all the chapters didn't feel like that at all. Actually dragging on might be the wrong way to put it, the scenes themselves are awesome but the time between sets of chapters makes you want to get to the meat of thing but that's more a symptom of Patreon stories in general than the writing itself

Lumpenhans

Everything is dead quiet after Fabi's skill demonstration. "Barry makes ilusions of Sal with top hat, monocle and walking stick. And lets him give a monologue about how the inability of the build quality of questacademy and the cheapness of the Hunterguild always stands in the way of his brillants and what he could achieve with proper materials and funding." best marketing move ever

Lacan

I was really glad to see the abruptness of Fabi's skill imprinting being addressed in this chapter set. That was one thing that bugged me a bit last time, because this seems like the kind of thing you'd absolutely give a heads-up about. And, honestly, it makes me sort of wonder how this world even functions (my historian brain is rearing its nerdy head here), because everything feels extremely ad hoc and held together with hope and duct tape. The Hunter's Bureau is the closest thing to a government, as it seems to control land and property, but the on-a-dime changes that everyone seems to make (from Chatfield at the Academy to Prestige in the Tower to Robert here at the gala) feels functionally....unstable and one bad bottle of tequila from collapsing. Even the monetary system feels unstable, because there are credits, but also Q-Cred, and the fact that a *school* is running off its own, competing monetary system is wild. Moreover, there are people who can spend millions of a currency that isn't backed by any government. So far, I've been treating it like it's a post-apocalyptic anime where you just squint and don't look too closely at the logic. But I do pretty regularly think about the fact that Sal and his family are wealthy by any metric, but in a society that seems truly on the brink, I'm not sure how that's possible. It seems like all the reclamation zones are urban so....who is growing the food and where are they doing it? Who is growing the corn to make the bourbon for the old fashioneds? Are they just drinking alcohol from the Before Times? *squints* PS: The story absolutely flows better with variable length chapters!

Lisa Johnson

Wow! Very exciting. These are the pages that make sleeping impossible.

km272727

Just how impressive is 240 gates again I forgot😭

Nate

Prestige has 240 gates, I went back to see her analysis Sal did on her before the excursion.

Jason Reynolds

There is a line from Anderson Royce in book 2 where he comments he has a useless ability for regrowing vegetation in a society that has unlimited food growth.

Jason Reynolds

I have a question about the visor. It says that Sal pulled it off his invisible belt. Does that mean it is the evolutionary belt and holster which would also hold is revolver? Also when he created the revolver to match the visor, they said the to pieces needed to be the same level to be compatable. Was that only for the creation of them or did it somehow send essence to the revolver if it was left at home. If he did have the revolver and holster, why didn't they start burning up his pants?

Lumpenhans

The real question is how many gates can sal get with the Perfect ability together with the potion

Nate

Lombardi teaching a master class with Sal, Whisper and Lucia would be very interesting as well. After he hinted what a trio they would be.

Naotsugu97

So, after thinking about it a minute, I think my best serious suggestions for Patreon tiers would be the “standard”. Where it is tied to extra content in the form of tied access to chapters. I.e. $3 gets you X chapter, $5 = X, 10 = X. With extra premium tiers beyond that offering story input. Like crafting items or even side characters. However, I don’t know if your writing style would allow for building and maintaining a backlog of chapters. Also, you’d have to be sure to provide caveats that just donating larger sums does not equal allowing bad or offensive suggestions. I mean, no one wants to read about Sal crafting an extraction towel for Ford Prefect. And while a P.O.V. Gun would be a devastating weapon, I think infringement might be a thing!

Dawn Zeleznik

Posted earlier that I loved the chapters, but I had a question about changing tiers. Is this just changing what we get access to or is it changing monthly payments or both? I have to try and control my reading expenses or I’d spend several hundred a month easily, so may need to adjust the reading budget somewhere. I also saw on the membership page you signed as James, are we calling you by your least preferred name?

James Parker

Hey loved the chapters but I want to scream. What the hell happened to his tracker and gun from being in that essence field!! Must know, must know!!!

mark el

Didn't really go into the condition of the dress after the comment that it may have been damaged due to the essence storm. How did doc Ameye not see or comment on his tracker when it was on his belt as he could see Sophia's. This also explains why sal never analyzed his mom or dad with his tracker as it probably would have gave away their hunter rank... Why would argento auctions have ever needed to take strong armed contracts with this shown strength?

Alteron

For the future, Sal needs to upgrade the machine to mythic, and create some self replenishing mythic cores, or all his optimised weaves will be for nothing.

Alteron

One small thing, I would really like a description of how the Commander cores arrive.

Alteron

I think it’s also mentioned that the steaks are artificial. So it could be like in Shadowrun where most food is created from soybeans. And the soybeans made in large tanks.

Nate

Wahoo just got book three on kindle today. Hopefully audible isn’t too far away.

BrianJNordon

On the question of Doc Ameye not seeing the Tracker on Sal's belt, he wasn't looking for it. He was looking at Sophia's face when he noticed the invisible tracker. :)

BrianJNordon

Hey Dawn, with the Apple charges coming into effect in the next few weeks, I'm going to be moving from the $3 tier up to a $5 tier. There are a few reasons for this, including the cost of commissioning merch prototypes, and keeping my mortgage paid during the low-royalty months. The $5 tier will have all chapters that are available, I won't lock them behind higher tiers. My real name is Brian James Nordon, but when I started writing Wildcards, I was scared that it would lead back to my employer. I was also worried that people would hate my stories and I'd be a laughing stock to anyone that knew me, so I wrote under the name James Northman. :) I've spent my whole life being called Brian, so I'm very happy to have you call me that. James doesn't offend me at all, as it's a nice callback to the Wildcards days.

Nate

Best news to start my Friday 😃 (it’s Friday here in NZ, think most are still in Thursday😂)

BaguaBrady

Did I read correctly that Sal just quadrupled his essence gates, all opened and perfectly established? So he just jumped from 60 to 240 open gates?

BaguaBrady

Well we know at the least all his gates were shattered, so she either left him partially broken or finished the job. Odd it is left up in the air though, had to see if I missed something

Kenneth Darlin

You know, I love the character creation. I also think getting physical book copies would be an awesome reward, but I realize that might be difficult from Ireland. Other than that, maybe just an annual Patreon package like at Christmas to say thanks and here is a bunch of marketing materials so we can all encourage others to read your books?

Nate

Wow that’s insane, I thought it would drop same time for everyone and the date would be adapted to the location. Huh that’s cool I’m one of the first to get it. But in fairness I don’t get new chapters until Tuesday and you get them Monday 😂

BrianJNordon

Shattering gates means they need to be reformed. You'll remember at the start of Book 1, his Skill Registration shattered his internal essence gates, but he still had sixty of them to eventually cultivate towards. This time he has around 100 activated out of a maximum 240. Leaving roughly 140 still dormant within him.

BaguaBrady

Ok thanks for the clarification! I wasn't sure if that was where he stopped the procedure for now. I'm glad he didn't shoot up to full complete though

Tanstaafl

I assume we will get to see what the tracker evolved into ... great tale so far

Tanstaafl

Will we see what the tracker evolved to

Andrew Tobin

Happy Saviours release day 🥳

Dawn Zeleznik

Woke up and had new book on my kindle!!!

Tony

I’m hoping the traker copy’s protocol. Now that will be something

Fortunis

After that shit show there's no fucking way I'd work with Robert. Ever.

Wes Brown

Good, the chapters are way too short

Sean Shivers

The pacing for this feels really weird. I like the calm broken up by action... but this was a lot of growth all at once. Both his secrets coming out, doubling his gates, and his legendary equipment all happebing at once is a lot. It might feel less like such a Huge leap if he just doesnt realize that hia visor has evolved until a later chapter. Maybe in the destress after party fabi asks to see it or something is when He notices.