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One Piece - Halfway Broken - Ch 44-47 (Patreon)

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Whew! Managed to get this done right on schedule. Not sure I'll do able to do the same with the next release (My Hero Automata) as I've got a short vacation to visit family coming up. But I'll do my best.

As for this release, Skypiea! I'm...mostly happy with it? It proved to be a lot harder to write than I'd expected, and I had to rewatched a couple of the episodes in question. There was a lot more talking and back and forth between Pagaya/Conis and the crew than I remembered. I didn't really want to dive too much into that, as anyone reading a One Piece fanfic probably already knows most of what they covered, so I had to find a balance point between showing and telling there that I'm not entirely sure I got right.

Then, of course, there's the fact that yes the fight between the Strawhats and Enel's forces is in these chapters. As I've mentioned multiple times before, combat isn't my strength as a writer. But I think I did a pretty decent job of it. Even if another writer might have gone into far more blow-by-blow detail than I did. More on the fighting in the author's notes when I get to them (they'll be in a nested series of comments on this post, but I'm off to eat dinner first. So they won't be there immediately).

As always, the new chunks of story (just barely shy of 15,000 words this time), are attached here in various formats. I will also be updating the Master Files in the Pinned Post to included the new content. Enjoy!

Comments

Novus's Fanfiction Works

This comment is for Author's Notes! Nested below this comment are a series of comments containing author's notes for each chapter. Note that they will be spoiler heavy! So you should probably read the chapters first...

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151787952

Chapter 44: Honestly, not much to say here. I always found it silly that most authors don't realize how insanely small the gate fee actually is. Oh, it's not cheap. But the canon Strawhat crew would have only needed to pay like 600,000 belli. Nami being stingy I understand, but none of the rest of the crew brought that fact up. Luffy...well, I guess canon Luffy probably couldn't have done the math. Zoro wouldn't have cared and Robin was new. So...maybe it makes sense? Here, it doesn't, since Luffy is trying to gain a little time to do business with the islanders before Enel pulls a dick move.

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151787952

Chapter 45: Ugh. This was...wwwwaaaayyy more awkward than I expected to write. I watched the episodes where they interacted with Conis and her father and it was...like watching a children's educational show. That was the level of explanations. Which, granted, needed to happen when the show ran, as no one knew about dials. But coming in a decade later when everyone already knows, and the whole thing is just...bland as an artist drawing a polar bear in a snowstorm. If it felt like I skipped a bunch of the detail here...that's why. Most of it was super boring if you already know anything about One Piece.

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151787952

Chapter 46: So, a little tease for Robin. I figured that Skypiea, uninvolved with the WG as it is, would be one of the most likely places in the world to still have some info. Mind you, I had to keep it simple...because Oda still hasn't revealed much about the Void Century.

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151787952

Chapter 47: So, I HOPE I did I decent job of showing that Luffy seriously struggled against an opponent for the first time. Enel was genuinely a threat to him, and the only reason it wasn't even diceier was because Luffy's foreknowledge let him preemptively take actions that would put Enel on the back foot. This, I hope, serves to show that Luffy isn't actually super OP. Yes, he's better off than his canon counterpart. But he's not a Yonko. He can't Steamroll the entire Marine Officer Corp, either. Excluding Garp as a special case, Luffy is essentially roughly a Vice Admiral in comparative power. He's maybe on the higher end of that spectrum (again, ignoring Garp), but he'd STRUGGLE against any of the Logia Admiral Trio (Ice, Magma, Light). In truth, as he is, he'd probably lose if forced to fight any of that trio to the death. He'd be better off if it he was just trying to escape. But, unless he had backup, he'd most likely lose against any of that trio. Likewise, any of the Yonko and a few of the more powerful Warlords like Mihawk would slap him down without too much effort as he is currently. He's strong, but he's not truly broken. Which, again, is literally the reason for the title of the series. His System let him become Halfway Broken. But only Halfway. He still has a ways to go...

Matthew Robar

When you start talking about Enel and his devil fruit, you refer to it as “lighting”, I’m not sure if it’s the same for every copy as I’m reading the pdf. ‘I only caught the issue as you mentioned sharing his “lighting” resistance, and that isn’t something Luffy has

Bob Saget

So, is he going to keep the logia lightning fruit Enel graciously provided him? If he eats it after he sufficiently masters his current fruit, then he'll probably have the most comprehensive and dynamic elemental ability in the setting (not necessarily the strongest fruit abilities, that's more of a subjective 'vs. debate'). While the redundancies of the two fruits might seem inefficient, by the same token the common ground between them should make it easy for him to 'level up' the new fruit with their high compatibility. Admittedly, the rumble fruit wouldn't be a bad fit for Usopp. But there are other canon fruits that are arguably as good or a better fit for him (bomb, spike, spring, magnet, castle, pocket, mark, arms, scroll, mirror, warp fruits). Which don't dilute Luffy's 'brand'. Plus, by eating the rumble, Luffy would get full use out of mastering his initial fruit (aside from eliminating his weakness) without having to branch out into a different set of supernatural abilities. Just more flexibility and strength added to his electrokinesis.

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151794413

Ugh. I fixed a bunch of those already, but I found nine more after you pointed it out. They are hard to spot since they aren't an error by the spell-checker standards, and it's literally only a letter difference. I updated the versions for this post with fixes for the ones I found.

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151798893

He's nowhere close to mastering his first fruit far enough to eat another. I've said it elsewhere, but I don't intend that to be a thing he manages until VERY late in the story. As for what to do with the Rumble Fruit...I'm legitimately still debating it. I'm sort of reluctant to age another DF to the crew, right after I just added two others (one of which was a Mythical Zoan). They may end up trading it to Alabasta for something...which benefits them fairly directly even aside from what they get out of it, given Alabasta is currently throwing a fit at the WG. Adding the Rumble-Rumble Fruit as a wild card in that fit would start to genuinely scare the WG a bit, whereas at the moment they are only mildly concerned.

Ototsu_Yume

Great chapters, kinda curious if he ate the Rumble fruit if it would simply merge with his current one giving it higher lightning control and elementalization; likewise if he fed it to his Jian, could he use it's innate abilities to teleport around, enhance his haki and extend it like a lightsaber. Thanks for the fun read.

Novus's Fanfiction Works
>>151807484

... ... ... Damn, now I want him to feed it to his jian. That would be an AWESOME way to upgrade his weapon. Though it would be a major shift from what I originally intended. Thanks for the idea. I'm still trying to decide what to do with the Rumble Fruit and that's got to be the single most interesting suggestion I've seen so far.

The Infiltrator

NNNOOO!!!!!!! I need more!!!!!!!

Emir Güven
>>151807484

Hmm... Masterbolt sword version forging it will be propably will be hell.

The Foreign Traveler

Finally, at last! *Cracks Knuckles* Let's get this all out of the way for you shall we Novus? Number 1! One Piece: HB Chapter 44 Page 1: ",seemingly under the delusion that hanging in midair and watching his attack go off "with smart". Correction: "was" smart. Page 2: Nami snorted, shook her head, and then moved off to poke and "proud" the rest of the crew. Correction: to "prod" the rest of the crew. His observations on that point were "nearly" tucked away, however. Correction: "neatly" tucked away. (?) he could see what appeared to be a waterfall of sorts was nothing of the sort. Correction: he could see what appeared to be a waterfall of sorts "that was, actually," nothing of the sort. (?) Page 5: As Gan Fall had not appeared, likely "do" to the lack of threat Wipe Out Boy had been to the crew... Correction: likely "due" to the lack of threat... Chapter 45 Page 6: "Well? Don't just stand there and gawk everyone! We have "and" island in the sky to explore!" Correction: "an" island in the sky... lay anchor without a proper seafloor to anchor "too". Correction: anchor "to". Page 10: Let "along" new information that had actually named a few of the countries involved. Correction: Let "alone". Chapter 46 Page 12 Maybe the fishmen themselves know more about "that" the little I do. Correction: "than" the little I do. That virtually never happened, so he'd made a quick check to what "wa" up. Correction: what "was" up. Chapter 47 Page 15 It was a spiritual ability, that drew "open" raw will in it's many forms. Correction: that drew "upon" raw will Page 17: One that applied only the Enemy. Correction: One that applied only "to" the Enemy. Page 20: ...only ripped a strangled shout from her as her muscles "refused" to fully obey and spasmed." "Refused to fully obey." Correction: ...only ripped a strangled shout from her as her muscles "mostly" refused to obey her will and they spasmed uncontrollably. "Mostly" refused to obey. (Italic "Mostly"? And using Fully would indicate to the readers that Kuina can't, shouldn't, be able to move at all. Mostly seems the better word to use for this in my opinion) Page 23: The first obstacle that the "priests" coming at the "discovery" from behind faced... Correction: The first obstacle that the Priests coming at the "Discovery" from behind faced... Page 24: Honestly, the man was "rather likely rather thankful in the moment as he felt his consciousness fade." Correction: Honestly, the man was "likely rather thankful in that moment as his consciousness faded." (?) ...outright easier to manipulate "that" something like bare ground. Correction: "than" something like bare ground. Page 25" "The must usually have the home field advantage." Correction: "They must usually have..." Page 26: "Zoro was apparently lost somewhere no where near anyone else." Correction: Zoro had, unsurprisingly, gotten himself so lost he was nowhere near(Italic) anyone else. (Tried a few corrections and I found this one to be more amusing somehow then the others. Up to you Novus! Like always you, of course, get the final word.) Phew! Amazing as always Novus! To combat Kaya's potential suspicions, Luffy could claim that he had been working on Elemental Resistances due to the 3 Admirals they are all going to inevitably face. With him already knowing about Akainu's Magma Logia due to Past Memory and how actual Information gathering your Luffy has portrayed, no way in HELL he doesn't already know about Kizaru's Light and Akoji's Ice Logia's even if he doesn't remember due to Past Memory. He could have been creating this technique and gotten so far into it already due to this. And given how overly-prepared your Luffy also likes to be, it's not "too" far-fetched that he'd also work on Lightning resistance too as a "just in case" they'd potentially meet a Lightning Fruit User... Just my thoughts and potential way you can implement to ease Kaya's, and maybe the crew's, suspicions if your heading that way! And the best part is that Luffy wouldn't even be lying...well, "technically" anyway.